Project: Hero

How many dry sentences can you fit in a paragraph?

How do you make such an interesting idea so dull in the first 10% of the book?

“We see another man in the outer office waiting”…what is this a movie script?

…I just…I can’t.  This style is not my cup of tea.  It’s got summaries like…I don’t know, it’s reading like my alternative paths tags.

I guess partly…it’s doing a lot of telling.  Not showing.

this is kind of the opposite of a rec?